Wednesday, May 12, 2010
Gentle Giant - Brandon
The Gentle Giant
Long long ago there lived a Gentle Giant living on a rain cloud in a Caslie He had a nice smile and lots of little friends. The Gentle Giant had built a big sandpit and had lots of trucks and diggers and cranes to play with, in it. When his friends came to play they would play in the sandpit and make lots of thingslike caslies and tonels
The children’s parents liked the Gentle Giant but got mad when everyone played in the sandpit because it would rain sand all over their houses and gardens below. Mums got angry because their floors were always sandy and when it rained it would get muddy. The people who liked gardening got mad because the leaves on the plants would break and they wouldn’t grow. The clothes always had sand through them when they were hanging on the washing line.The Gentle Giant was sad because the children were told not to play in the sandpit when they went to play with the Gentle Giant. He liked playing inside the caslie but he liked it better outside in the nice sunshine. He needed to work out how to fix the problem. Brandon
Long long ago there lived a Gentle Giant living on a rain cloud in a Caslie He had a nice smile and lots of little friends. The Gentle Giant had built a big sandpit and had lots of trucks and diggers and cranes to play with, in it. When his friends came to play they would play in the sandpit and make lots of thingslike caslies and tonels
The children’s parents liked the Gentle Giant but got mad when everyone played in the sandpit because it would rain sand all over their houses and gardens below. Mums got angry because their floors were always sandy and when it rained it would get muddy. The people who liked gardening got mad because the leaves on the plants would break and they wouldn’t grow. The clothes always had sand through them when they were hanging on the washing line.The Gentle Giant was sad because the children were told not to play in the sandpit when they went to play with the Gentle Giant. He liked playing inside the caslie but he liked it better outside in the nice sunshine. He needed to work out how to fix the problem. Brandon
Monday, May 10, 2010
Feedback guidelines
We have begun our stories. Could you please make comments about our descriptive writing. Can you picture our settings (House in the cloud) and the character (The Gentle Giant) yet. If not could you give us some suggestions to make our stories more interesting. Please don't worry about our spelling as this is something we are working on in the classroom during editing.
Thank you for your help.
Thank you for your help.
Wednesday, May 5, 2010
Gentle Giant-liam-2
Once upon a time there was a Gentle Giant with spicks all over his head that are sharpe as a nifk .The clouthes are metel armo that is gold and red legs,blue arms .The cloud is the shape of a tramplen and when they step on it they wiggle and jiggle like jelly.And taest like jelly and looks like jelly. There’s clouds that go’s up to the big cloud and they look like jelly.living on a cloud in a house. He was nice and had lots of little friends. The Gentle Giant had built a big sandpit and had lots of trucks and diggers to play with, in it. When his friends came to play they would play in the sandpit and make lots of things.
The children’s parents liked the Gentle Giant but got angry when everyone played in the sandpit because it would rain sand all over their houses and gardens below. Mums got grumpy because their floors were always sandy and when it rained it would get messy. The people who liked gardening got mad because the leaves on the plants would break and they wouldn’t grow. The clothes always had sand through them when they were hanging on the washing line.
The Gentle Giant got sad because the children were told not to play in the sandpit when they went and played with the Gentle Giant. He liked playing inside the house but he liked it better outside in the sunshine. He needed to work out how to fix the problem.
The children’s parents liked the Gentle Giant but got angry when everyone played in the sandpit because it would rain sand all over their houses and gardens below. Mums got grumpy because their floors were always sandy and when it rained it would get messy. The people who liked gardening got mad because the leaves on the plants would break and they wouldn’t grow. The clothes always had sand through them when they were hanging on the washing line.
The Gentle Giant got sad because the children were told not to play in the sandpit when they went and played with the Gentle Giant. He liked playing inside the house but he liked it better outside in the sunshine. He needed to work out how to fix the problem.
gentle giant 2- adrianna
long ago on a rainbow cloud in a house. He was nice and had lots of little friendsthat p lay with her play doughThe Gentle Giant had built a big sandpit and had lots of trucks and diggers to play with, in it. When his friends came to play they would play in the sandpit and make lots of things.
His house is like a King’s castle and the king’s castle colour is a purple castle it is made out of colour paper the door is as big as the giant.
The children’s parents liked the Gentle Giant but got angry when everyone played in the sandpit because it would rain sand all over their houses and gardens below. Mums got grumpy because their floors were always sandy and when it rained it would get messy. The people who liked gardening got mad because the leaves on the plants would break and they wouldn’t grow. The clothes always had sand through them when they were hanging on the washing line.
The Gentle Giant got sad because the children were told not to play in the sandpit when they went and played with the Gentle Giant. He liked playing inside the house but he liked it better outside in the sunshine. He needed to work out how to fix the problem.
His house is like a King’s castle and the king’s castle colour is a purple castle it is made out of colour paper the door is as big as the giant.
The children’s parents liked the Gentle Giant but got angry when everyone played in the sandpit because it would rain sand all over their houses and gardens below. Mums got grumpy because their floors were always sandy and when it rained it would get messy. The people who liked gardening got mad because the leaves on the plants would break and they wouldn’t grow. The clothes always had sand through them when they were hanging on the washing line.
The Gentle Giant got sad because the children were told not to play in the sandpit when they went and played with the Gentle Giant. He liked playing inside the house but he liked it better outside in the sunshine. He needed to work out how to fix the problem.
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